Phase 103 Translation Script

Your thoughts on the BAA universe. Anything can be posted here.

Moderator: crazyankan

Post Reply
User avatar
TargaryenX
Barjack soldier
Posts: 180
Joined: Sat Oct 31, 2009 12:30 am
Location: Japan

Phase 103 Translation Script

Post by TargaryenX »

01
(text under "last order" irrelevant)
Box: Mars Kingdom Parliament Camp
Reuben: FUCK!! Who cares about this Alita bitch!?

Reuben: Show me Captain Zazie! Cap-tain Za-zie!!
Box: Reuben

Reuben: Huh!?

Canary: You Moron!!
GG: What are you guys, six years old?
Box: Canary
Side: As her former subordinates look on, Zazie's fierce battle continues!!

02
No text

03
Phase 103: I'm Freeee!
Text: Calmly, silently, but violently.
(All other text irrelevant)

04
Gerambo: With Alita's revival...
Gerambo: The Space Angels are launching a savage counterattack!!

Rakan: I can't have you getting cocky just because you disabled the heretic bands on my waist!!
Rakan: They were getting kinda heavy anyway!!

SFX: Whoosh

05
No Text

06
SFX: gata
SFX: gata

Rakan: Hoo-ah!

07
Reuben: He stopped a shotgun blast with his fart!?
Canary: No...

Canary: He cancelled the momentum of the shot with a sonic boom.

Canary: He can create a shockwave with just a flick of his hips...this guy's not normal!!
Reuben: Aha!! So that's the power of a true pervert!!

Rakan: Armor-piercing Karate secret technique...
Rakan: Air shield!!

Zazie: Nice party trick.
Zazie: But you won't be able to stop rifle bullets like that.

Rakan: Indeed...
Rakan: However...

08
Rakan: Armor-piercing Karate secret technique
Rakan: Bullet impaler!

09
Reuben: No way...
Reuben: He deflected every shell with his fucking fingertips!

Canary: He's strong enough without having to rely on a gimmick like the heretic bands.

GG: Actually, I would say, now that he's free from the weight of the bands he can really show his true power.

Rakan: Dash wheel!!

10
SFX: Chak

11
Rakan: Creeper leap!!

12
SFX: Whoosh
SFX: Pop

Canary: He's making vapor cones with his jumps!

Reuben: Canary! You're an expert on high-velocity combat too! What's he doing!?

Vapor cone: A cloud that forms around airplanes when they near the sound barrier at low altitudes.

13
Canary: I can't believe you'd compare me to a sicko like him...
Reuben: Hey! You can feel hurt later!

Canary: The problem with bullet-level speeds is that you have increased air resistance and inertia...
Canary: and a decreased friction coefficient.

Canary: You can't usually move the way you want to.
Canary: Sometimes you'll see a bullet coming at you and not even be able to dodge.
Canary: Like this one time I had a mock battle with Captain Zazie...

Canary: And she beat me in no time at all...
Reuben: Did you really think you would win!?

Canary: He's completely ignoring proper form.
Canary: All of his movements are a little bit off, it's not logical to move that way at that speed...
Canary: But because of that, I can't read him!!

14
Rakan: For each band I take off...
Rakan: my body becomes even lii~iighter!!

Rakan: Aaah! Sooo light!
Rakan: I feel like I might just flyyyyy away!!

15
Box: Asteroid Ceres: Slum Town

Mrs. Rakan: Look...Joe...
Mrs. Rakan: It's your daddy...
Mrs. Rakan: Aaah...He looks like he's having so much fun.

Joe: Mother, please...
Joe: My father is dead.

16
SFX: Bzzzt

Joe: My dad is the strongest fighter in the universe!

Joe: No bullet can hit him, no matter what!
Joe: He even fights gangs with guns barehanded!!

17
Bully: That's gotta be some kind of cheap trick!!
Joe: No, it's true!!

Bully: Then why don't you prove it?

Bully: Here!!

Joe: D...Dad...
Rakan: What is it, Joe?
Rakan: The dojo is dangerous. You can't come in now.

Joe: I have a...present for you, dad.
Rakan: Really? That's so nice of you, Joe.

18
Joe: No bullet can hit him, no matter what.

Joe: He can dodge any bullet, no matter what.

Mrs. Rakan: Aiieeeeee!!

19
Doctor: We've stabilized your husband's condition.

Doctor: However, because the bullet destroyed part of the frontal lobe of his cerebrum...
Doctor: There may be some lingering effects on his memory and personality.

Person: A martial artist whose specialty is dodging bullets, shot in the head by his own son...
Person: Must be karma...
Person: Now he'll have no choice but to close his dojo.

Joe's Mother: Honey! Stop it!!

Rakan: I've gotta get rid of this stuff! It's too heavy!
Rakan: Skin!? I don't need skin on my face!!

Frontal lobe of the cerebrum: The region comprising the front part of the cerebrum. It governs things like social behavior, sexual behavior, and willpower. A famous real-life case of personality change as a result of frontal lobe destruction is Phineas Gage, who had an iron bar driven through his head during a railroad construction accident in 1848.

20
Rakan: Waaaaahooo!
Rakan: I'm freeeee!!

Rakan: There's nothing left to hold me back!

21
Person: Your husband is running all over town, punching holes in the walls!
Person: Pay for our repairs!
Mrs. Rakan: I'm...I'm sorry!!

Rakan: Hey, you guys...
Rakan: Daddy is going on a trip to train his karate skills.

Rakan: I mean, to put it simply...
Rakan: I'm gonna go fuck a lot of girls and kill a bunch of people!!

Rakan: So you guys just do whatever you want!!
Mrs. Rakan: Darling!!

22
Reuben: What is he? A goddamn cookie cutter!?

Canary: This is bad...

Zazie: My last magazine...!!

SFX: tink

23-24
No Text

25
Rakan: I see, throw up a smokescreen so I can't see and then fire another volley...
Rakan: She just keeps coming up with the best ideas!!

Rakan: It would probably work on most karate masters...
Rakan: Too bad it won't work on me~ee!!

26
Rakan: My son, my wife, are you watching me from somewhere out there?
Rakan: My heart and my body are sooo light right now!!

Rakan: My son, I'm sorry I couldn't live up to your expectations that time!!
Rakan: But daddy has changed!!
Rakan: Now your father can dodge any bullet, no matter what!!

27
Rakan: See...?
Rakan: Humans can change thiiiis much!!
Text: With nothing but sharp skills and the scrap of cloth around his waist, Rakan makes a late comeback!!!
Last edited by TargaryenX on Tue May 17, 2011 2:10 am, edited 6 times in total.
User avatar
Sergio Nova
Künstler
Posts: 2890
Joined: Fri Jul 06, 2007 3:08 pm
Location: São Paulo or Valles Marineris

Re: Phase 103 Translation Script

Post by Sergio Nova »

So such a scoundrel has ever had a family?


01
Reuben: FUCK!! Who cares about this Alita bitch?! (punctuation)

04
Rakan: They were getting kind of heavy, anyway!! (missing comma)

09
GG: Actually, I would say, now that he's free of the band's weight he can really show his true power. (missing comma)

17
Bully: Then, why don't you prove it? (missing comma, question mark)

Rakan: What is it, Joe? (missing comma)
Rakan: The dojo is dangerous. You can't come in now. (punctuation)

Joe: I have a... present for you, dad. (missing comma)
Rakan: Really? That's so nice of you, Joe. (missing comma)

21
Person: Your husband is running all over town, punching holes in the walls! (too long text)

Rakan: I'm gonna fuck a lot of girls and kill a bunch of people!! (gonna go fuck - grammatically, it is perfect, but Rakan's linguistic style is far from perfection, I daresay.)

22
Reuben: What is he? A goddamn cookie cutter!? (punctuation, compound)
User avatar
Burning Angel
GIB
Posts: 296
Joined: Sun Aug 24, 2008 4:28 pm

Re: Phase 103 Translation Script

Post by Burning Angel »

04
Gerambo: The Space Angels are launching a fierce counterattack!! (sounds cooler, I think)
Rakan: They were getting kinda heavy anyway!! (following Sergio's interpretion of Rakan's linguistic style)

07
Rakan: Armor-piercing Karate secret technique...
(This is Rakan's style's name from several dozen chapters ago, isn't it?) Yes

13
Canary: But because of that, I can't read him!!
User avatar
TargaryenX
Barjack soldier
Posts: 180
Joined: Sat Oct 31, 2009 12:30 am
Location: Japan

Re: Phase 103 Translation Script

Post by TargaryenX »

Rakan: They were getting kind of heavy, anyway!! (missing comma)

Then, why don't you prove it? (missing comma)
I won't pretend that I'm an expert on the proper use of commas, but if I were to read those lines aloud there would be no pause, so perhaps we're imagining the delivery differently. Either way, I would say that the dialogue's flow is more important that absolute grammatical correctness here.
Rakan: I'm gonna fuck a lot of girls and kill a bunch of people!! (gonna go fuck - grammatically, it is perfect, but Rakan's linguistic style is far from perfection, I daresay.)
I feel like the emphasis of that line is that he's leaving his family to do those things, hence "go". I don't think it's inconceivable even for a person as strange as him to say a line like that.
Gerambo: The Space Angels are launching a fierce counterattack!! (sounds cooler, I think)
Ah, but I just used "fierce" to describe Zazie's battle on page one. In the last chapter it's also "fierce counterattack" and it would make Gerambo's line nearly identical.
User avatar
Burning Angel
GIB
Posts: 296
Joined: Sun Aug 24, 2008 4:28 pm

Re: Phase 103 Translation Script

Post by Burning Angel »

Fair enough. TargaryenX, I don't want to pressure you, but when could you have the translation for 104 ready?
User avatar
crazyankan
Crazy Editor!
Posts: 1041
Joined: Sun Nov 27, 2005 7:30 pm
Location: Tiphares/Sweden

Re: Phase 103 Translation Script

Post by crazyankan »

Burning Angel wrote:Fair enough. TargaryenX, I don't want to pressure you, but when could you have the translation for 104 ready?
Already asking for the next script? :O

btw, thanks for the c103 script TargaryenX! :)
Image
User avatar
Sergio Nova
Künstler
Posts: 2890
Joined: Fri Jul 06, 2007 3:08 pm
Location: São Paulo or Valles Marineris

Re: Phase 103 Translation Script

Post by Sergio Nova »

TargaryenX wrote:
Gerambo: The Space Angels are launching a fierce counterattack!! (sounds cooler, I think)
Ah, but I just used "fierce" to describe Zazie's battle on page one. In the last chapter it's also "fierce counterattack" and it would make Gerambo's line nearly identical.
Looking for a suggestion? What about "heinous"?
User avatar
Burning Angel
GIB
Posts: 296
Joined: Sun Aug 24, 2008 4:28 pm

Re: Phase 103 Translation Script

Post by Burning Angel »

Already asking for the next script? :O

btw, thanks for the c103 script TargaryenX!
I'm sure TargaryenX is very busy. I didn't want to sound pushy, so I apologize for it. I asked out of curiosity.
User avatar
TargaryenX
Barjack soldier
Posts: 180
Joined: Sat Oct 31, 2009 12:30 am
Location: Japan

Re: Phase 103 Translation Script

Post by TargaryenX »

It's ok, I've just been getting lazy because the cleaning is taking a bit. I can probably have it out in the next couple days.
User avatar
Sergio Nova
Künstler
Posts: 2890
Joined: Fri Jul 06, 2007 3:08 pm
Location: São Paulo or Valles Marineris

Re: Phase 103 Translation Script

Post by Sergio Nova »

Hey, Targa, just an observation I had forgotten to check previously. The name of Queen Limeira's faction is Mars Kingdom Parliament, not Royal Parliament (page 01).
User avatar
crazyankan
Crazy Editor!
Posts: 1041
Joined: Sun Nov 27, 2005 7:30 pm
Location: Tiphares/Sweden

Re: Phase 103 Translation Script

Post by crazyankan »

Release today or tomorrow :]
Image
User avatar
Sergio Nova
Künstler
Posts: 2890
Joined: Fri Jul 06, 2007 3:08 pm
Location: São Paulo or Valles Marineris

Re: Phase 103 Translation Script

Post by Sergio Nova »

crazyankan wrote:Release today or tomorrow :]
God bless you! :)
Post Reply