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Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Wed Apr 22, 2009 8:29 pm
by Dharko
nah, the changes are piece of cake [¿así se dice?]
The problem is: I´ll have to make zise smaller the words for fit it [& I don´t like it]
I thought the same, you read my mind jaja.

modifing then...

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Wed Apr 22, 2009 11:39 pm
by Cailon
Cool!

Since this thread has become a little mess of our different scripts and versions for different extra pages, I'll post the final script for Zanber here again! ^^



1. Mars, home of the hearts of all warriors. The latest model of the "Zanber" company, that is domiciled on its red ground and grew large in its rich war-culture: the KZ90.
Here, we would like to introduce you to the opulent equipment of this weapon, lovingly called "boss-gun".

2. Zanber: an atelier that manufactures custom-made firearms for Martian special forces and high-ranked mercenaries.
The prices may be high, but the products, based on unique concept designs as well as the service, enjoy a cult status. The company name derivates from "Zanbato", the huge swords used on the battlefields of medieval Japan to slay mounted warriors.

3. 35mm grenade launcher

4. Rifle, caliber 7.5mm
One achieves an accuracy by the use of a stabilization-system, predestinating this weapon to be a sniper rifle.

5. Shotgun, 20mm
This optional weapon on the side is a mighty friend in close combat.

6. Ternary rocket launcher
Optional weapon on the side. With a knob, you can switch between the different weapons on the side.

7. Saw-bayonet
You could call this huge bayonet the trademark of Zanber. Thanks to its strong vibration-drive, even steel-plates with a thickness of 3cm are easily cut. In case of emergency, it even can be shot out of its barrel, which is integrated into the body of the weapon.

8. Security butt
Is linked with the user identification system. If the security chamber is charged with a bullet, the thief of this weapon gets shot in his shoulder the moment he pulls the trigger. Alternatively, if the chamber is charged with electric ignitable explosives, he can be blown into pieces cocksure.

9. Order now to get one bullet for free.

10. Emergency call button
In case of emergency, if you have concluded the Zanber Care Protection annual contract, you can call a Zanber task force for help.

11. This service is available only in regions specified by Zanber.


12. An elite unit under Zanber commando.

13. Magazine for the 25mm grenades

14. Magazine for the 7.5mm rounds

15. Security grip
Security is guaranteed by two user identifications, firstly by checking the users ID-chip, secondly by a retina scan performed by the sighting telescope. If any other than the current user is pulling the trigger, his thumb will be severed by an in-build thumb-guillotine.

16. It can be shot every ammunition within the Mars-standards. Because of the reliable Zanber-mechanism, the rifle can even be charged with a mix of light ammunition and such of 200percentage of effectiveness. With one out of 10.000 shots, a stoppage of the gun is very rare. We guarantee a secure operation of the weapon within -200 °C and 300 °C.

17. Magazine for the shotgun

18. Gun barrel cooling system
With a combination of a waste heat conduit and a Seebeck-generator, the heat of the gun barrel is efficiently transformed into electricity which charges the storage battery.
[for Seebeck-generator, see: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Thermocouple]

19. Operation recorder
The images of the sighting telescope, the data, sensors, bullet count, used ammunition, hit rate and so on are continuously copied into the internal storage. This data can be used for operation analysis, for confirmation or as a personal souvenir.

20. The Smart Sight System
Equipped with the latest facial recognition system. In combination with a video-stabilizer, every camouflage will be penetrated and the enemy will immediately be detected. The fully automatic "say cheese-mode" allows you to deliver a bullet into the forhead of every grinning enemy, automatically.

21. Even hidden enemys are clearly visible.
[*Its not that good to recognize in the raw but the picture shows a bulk of scrap and some camouflaged faces or helmets in it. Around every one of them is a crosshairs.]

22. The most powerful individual weapon, a present for every one-man-army!!

23. Screw you!

24. A hell of a sergeant on your submonitor
Into the submonitor that shows all kinds of data, the virtual character of "a hell of a sergeant" can be faded in. He not only gives strategical hints, but he also insults the enemy in your place if you lack the rhetorical basis. On top of that, this reliable, tough guy kicks your butt equally to cheering you up. The character can be individually customized.

25. An example for individual customization.

26. Further functions and service
- System to detect a marksman
By using numerous internal microphones, the trajectory of enemy bullets is calculated to show the direction of where the marksman is hiding.

- Variable camouflage lacquering
Pattern and color of the coating change in many ways, according to the environment, the weather or your mood.

27. Examples of different pattterns

28.
- Zanber-Link
Connects the gun with other Zanber-products and allows their combined control.

- Zanber-news feed (with costs)
With the conclusion of a Zanber annual contract you can receive the electronic news of the military recon-satellites of Zanber company. You can hear the weather forecast for air strikes, the latest news about the dispersion of landmines or the recent loss index.

29. Special options for members only

30. Autonomously moving stand
- Strong legs and hip. Optimally for ambuscades.

31. Rounds with berserker-cells
These rounds are filled with very active type A berserker-cells of the Oasa-production. With high-pressurized propellant, a range of 700 meters is possible. The ANMP-shell guarantees your safety.

32. Parasite-belt
Single-handedly connectable with your bain. By using an allocator, up to 10 weapons can be freehandedly fired. Shoot your enemies with your spinal cord!!

33. Living aim
Filled with intestines, these aims not only impart a realistic feeling of strikes, but they are also environment-friendly, because they are made out of 100% biodegradable material.
[*@Intestines: with "living aim" and the picture of a gagged, moving man in mind, "guts" or "intestines" could be a mini-censorship in the German edition, maybe because a gagged man as a truly living aim was too strong for them...]

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Tue Apr 28, 2009 5:03 pm
by Dharko
Here the Zamber corrected:

Image

FIXED!!
I´m going to eat something...

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Tue Apr 28, 2009 10:23 pm
by Sergio Nova
Problems I can see in the Zanber page:

Even hidden enemies are clearly visible. (spelling)

Zanber news feed (with costs).
With the conclusion of a Zanber annual contract, you can receive… (comma)


Special options for members only.
Single-handedly connectable with your brain. (spelling)
By using an allocator, up to 10 weapons can be freehandedly fired. (adverb)

Saw-bayonet
You could call this huge bayonet the trademark of Zanber. Thanks to its strong vibration-drive, even steel-plates with a thickness of 3cm are easily cut. In case of emergency, it even can be shot out of its barrel, which is integrated into the body of the weapon. (verbal tense)

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Wed Apr 29, 2009 12:22 am
by crazyankan
I will be adding these extra pages in the phase 82 release.
Great work guys! :D

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Wed Apr 29, 2009 7:43 am
by Cailon
@Darkho: Nice, thanks!
Can you also post the updated Vampire-picture, then we have them all three, Vampires, Zalem and Zanber and Crazy can include them :D

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Wed Apr 29, 2009 8:29 am
by litchi master
while admiring the great job you have done, I have just noticed a typing mistake
in the parasite belt case bain is written instead of brain.

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Thu May 07, 2009 8:31 pm
by Dharko
Fixed.

And the other 2 picts are in the page 2 of this topic.

Xau.

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Thu May 07, 2009 11:19 pm
by Sergio Nova
Dharko wrote:Fixed.

And the other 2 picts are in the page 2 of this topic.

Xau.
You forgot to change enemys for enemies below the second (from left to right) picture

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Fri May 08, 2009 9:21 am
by Dharko
Fixed again all the details, think so...

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Fri May 08, 2009 11:05 am
by Sergio Nova
Dharko wrote:Fixed again all the details, think so...
The fact is: you are a great artist! 8)

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Thu Jun 04, 2009 11:20 am
by Cailon
Is it just my computer or are the images for the Zalem-page and the Zanber-page down?

Dharko, could you upload them again? Then I'll pack them in a .rar and Crazy can include all three in our next release. 8)

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 1:56 am
by Sergio Nova
Cailon wrote:Is it just my computer or are the images for the Zalem-page and the Zanber-page down?

Dharko, could you upload them again? Then I'll pack them in a .rar and Crazy can include all three in our next release. 8)
I have just checked. They are in perfect reading position. And Dharko has already changed all the images for the last versions. And do not forget the Cognates' page, please.

Re: Some GLO extra pages --- proofreading needed

Posted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 9:39 am
by Cailon
Eh, strange, now I can see them, too. :lol: :?

So here is the .rar with all three extra pages: Zalem (vol.02), Vampires (vol.09) and Zanber (vol.11)

http://www.mediafire.com/?zzywzyyzzyz