GLO 77

Post by **crazyankan** » Wed May 07, 2008 12:00 pm

Cailon wrote:Many thanks for the huge amount of work. That sure was a ride through the japanese language!

btw: Robby the robot went a long way chek this out, first volume BAA (bottom left):
http://img3.imagebanana.com/view/4gf7z5c/BA01091.jpg

Nice find. You can also see http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Maximillian_(robot) from the page that page you posted.

Post by **crazyankan** » Thu May 08, 2008 11:52 pm

Kamui04, if you make changes, can you make a mark or something? And can you also post them on jcafe?
Phase 77

Sergio Nova · Post by **Sergio Nova** » Sun May 11, 2008 11:22 pm

Commenting the text on phase 77

[Please, note: I am writing based on the version published on May 7th, so excuse me if anything has already been changed]

page 6 (raw258)
However, the Space Karate Allies… (missing comma)
Will this person approve their participation or not? (question mark, I believe)

page 7 (raw259)
Hiii! (missing exclamation mark)

page 8 (raw260)
Manutite – I liked the solution. First, it is not exactly easy to make up words, and I daresay that manutite is phonetically more elegant than chirotite.

page 10 (raw262)
Isn’t it lively down there? (question mark, I believe)
Alita! (punctuation)
Sure! (punctuation)

page 12 (raw264)
… we, the UKF… (ellipsis necessary at the beginning, I believe)

page 13 (raw265)
Like… (ellipsis)
…this! (ellipsis, punctuation)
…nobody WILL feel compassion towards him!! (double negative)
The pun on this Karate school name and ITS secret technique… (pronoun) [Also, let me say: the solution was great!]

page 14 (raw266)
Oh! (punctuation)
Ohhh! (punctuation)
Hey! (punctuation)
Hiiii! (punctuation)

page 15 (raw267)
Listen well… (ellipsis)
… you shitheads! (ellipsis)

page 16 (raw268)
…if you call yourself a karateka, then show me your strength! (no reason to be capital letter; missing comma)

page 20 (raw272)
Mr. Hopper, please, explain to us… (missing comma)
…there’s a total of 180 million karate practitioners… (no reason to be capital letter)
…leading to confrontations among them, creating a very chaotic… (comma, simply)
Karate, ITS birth and evolution. (pronoun)
Collapse of civilization due to meteor strike. (isn’t it a planetoid?)
Obs.: I will not deepen the debate about Okinawa/Ryukyu simply because I do not have the necessary knowledge. When I commented that, initially, I was based on American Heritage Dictionary (American English) and Collins English Dictionary (British English), but, honestly, I have never been an authority on geography. Although it seems too weird to me that the geographical definitions depend on the language, I have no base. As to the Japanese edition of Wikipedia, sorry, but I am completely illiterate.

page 21 (raw273)
… being Daikokuten (Daikoku) the name of ITS representative. (pronoun)
…their true fighting potential can't be taken lightly!! (ellipsis)
The kanjis are pronounced Raida-mon, which is close to how Riderman sounds. (missing comma)
… the representative with a grasshopper head… (no reason to be capital letter)
Finally, Tesla style and Volt are self explanatory. (missing comma)

page 22 (raw274)
…what we researchers call the Unknown Martial Artist. (unnecessary comma, missing n)

page 23 (raw275)
What a mockery! (exclamation mark)
The school that HAS recently been standing out in actual combat!! (present perfect)
Dokyu, from Taurus. (missing comma)
Dagatsu, from Scorpio. (missing comma)
Gyorin, from Pisces. (missing comma)

page 24 (raw276)
For the first time, we can have a proper conversation like this. (missing comma)
First, I must express my gratitude to you. (missing comma)
Here Toji uses “Kiden”, which is an archaic form of “you”". [As don’t have the knowledge to opine about Japanese archaism, so this is a question, not a suggestion: If they have an archaic form of you, would it not be translated as thou or ye?

page 25 (raw277)
If I WEREN’T defeated... (subjunctive)
…I wouldn't have found… (ellipsis)
…couldn't answer the call… (ellipsis)

page 26 (raw278)
I let them die! (punctuation)
But… (ellipsis)
…I was so heartless! (ellipsis; punctuation)
page 27 (raw279)
…polishing the karate techniques… (ellipsis)

page 29 (raw281)
…in these 40 years. (plural)
I feel as if I had been back to my initial motivation. (conjunction; verbal tense) [Actually, I am not sure if grammar in this specific case has to be precise or not, as Toji does not have the same linguistic level Mbadi does. Or does he?]
My chest danced as when I was in a dojo!! (conjunction)

page 31 (raw283)
For a warrior, there isn’t anything pleasanter than this!! (I could not make a conclusion. Is that said by the narrator or by Toji? If by Toji, I really do not know if it is the case of correcting)
During the time I was absent… (ellipsis)
…this guy got unbelievably strong... (ellipsis; misspelling)

hepar · Post by **hepar** » Mon May 12, 2008 3:16 pm

Sergio wrote:Commenting the text on phase 77
Page 8 (raw260)
Manutite – I liked the solution. First, it is not exactly easy to make up words, and I daresay that manutite is phonetically more elegant than chirotite.

Palmitite?

Though I like how manutite sounds.

Kimuji wrote:she says, "let's go to the pool" 78 will be fanservice chapter

Kamui04 wrote:panel3
Alita: This time we'll fight with everything we've got!!

Damn...

Playing dirty tricks with someone who cannot understand moonspeech is the lowest...

Kamui04 · Post by **Kamui04** » Mon May 12, 2008 7:31 pm

Sergio wrote: page 13 (raw265)
…nobody WILL feel compassion towards him!! (double negative)

If double negative making a positive doesn't fit. Then change it altogether into a positive. Since your correction left it as a negative making it like nobody will feel compassion towards Hetzlers postrate.

I'd use:
That prostrate position, an attack to the human psyche so beautiful, almost everybody will feel compassion towards him!!
This adds a unintended joke...

the almost everybody and Zekka not being one to fall for it.

Post by **crazyankan** » Tue May 13, 2008 11:08 am

Kamui04, can you take a look at Hyatt suggestions at jcafe?

Sergio Nova · Post by **Sergio Nova** » Wed May 14, 2008 10:31 pm

Kamui04 wrote: I'd use:
That prostrate position, an attack to the human psyche so beautiful, almost everybody will feel compassion towards him!!
This adds a unintended joke... the almost everybody and Zekka not being one to fall for it.

I am entirely lost. As I have already said, I cannot opine about the jokes in the original text, as I am completely illiterate. Anyway, let me say that almost everybody is completely different from nobody.

hepar · Post by **hepar** » Thu May 15, 2008 6:24 am

He's saying that there was double negation in the text from the very beggining:
"Nobody cannot feel compassion towards him after what he did" equals
"Everybody will feel compassion towards him after what he did"

You can use the hidden double negation if it's too hard to read (hey now, don't listen to me, I'm not a native speaker!) e.g.

UKF Karateka: That prostrate position, an attack to the human psyche so beautiful that nobody can deny the feeling of compassion towards him!!

Post by **crazyankan** » Thu May 22, 2008 7:23 pm

19 of 31 pages finished.
Should be out this week.

Akumeno · Post by **Akumeno** » Fri May 23, 2008 1:16 am

thnx !!

Hramm · Post by **Hramm** » Mon May 26, 2008 8:43 pm

Bump

Post by **crazyankan** » Mon May 26, 2008 10:45 pm

I have to start over.
Windows died, and I had to formate my hard drive. And I didn't save the work on my backup drive. So all the work on that phase are gone.

But give me a week. And it should be out.

jkays · Post by **jkays** » Tue May 27, 2008 12:06 am

crazyankan wrote:I have to start over.
Windows died, and I had to formate my hard drive. And I didn't save the work on my backup drive. So all the work on that phase are gone.

But give me a week. And it should be out.

NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

Seriously though, dont you just hate computers when they die for no apparent reason and formating is the only option

happened to me plenty of times

Akumeno · Post by **Akumeno** » Tue May 27, 2008 1:11 am

well no problem at lear Crazyankanb has the translated scrip so no restart from the mere begining

HumanRage · Post by **HumanRage** » Tue May 27, 2008 3:21 pm

formatting is the very very very last resort option

98% of the time, a repair is enough to make windows "useable" again, and at least salvage data.

denzacar · Post by **denzacar** » Tue May 27, 2008 4:43 pm

If it is just Windows that have died - have something like SLAX on a CD or USB stick.

Boot (just pop in the CD), backup files and THEN format.

Post by **crazyankan** » Thu May 29, 2008 8:41 pm

Hramm: Can you upload those pages again.
Get some error when I try to unrar them

And please, megaupload instead of rapidshare.

Hramm · Post by **Hramm** » Fri May 30, 2008 11:25 pm

The file is not corrupted, luckily because it wasn't on my HD anymore. ^^
Have u tried with winrar ?
GLO.77.zip

Post by **crazyankan** » Mon Jun 02, 2008 7:27 pm

After a Vista installation that was fucking my computer up.
I installed three different Win XP versions, all of them was not up to date.

But finally I got a version a up to date version of XP with SP3.

And now everything is running smoothly. And hopefully I can do some typsetting tomorrow.

Sorry for the wait.

Kamui04 · Post by **Kamui04** » Tue Jun 03, 2008 1:43 am

Windows Vista is no no, avoid it like the plague.

Post by **crazyankan** » Tue Jun 03, 2008 1:33 pm

1/3 done.
Gonna work on it some more later.

*update*
31/31 pages done.
Gonna take a final look at it later.
It will be released later this evening.

jkays · Post by **jkays** » Tue Jun 03, 2008 5:13 pm

crazyankan wrote:1/3 done.
Gonna work on it some more later.

*update*
31/31 pages done.
Gonna take a final look at it later.
It will be released later this evening.

Good work, cant wait

Twitchywrote · Post by **Twitchywrote** » Tue Jun 03, 2008 5:59 pm

crazyankan wrote:1/3 done.
Gonna work on it some more later.

*update*
31/31 pages done.
Gonna take a final look at it later.
It will be released later this evening.

MARVELOUS.