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Twitchywrote wrote: "Contrivanceless" really isn't a word. Maybe....gee, this is hard...organic nanomachines? I'm just shooting in the dark, here, though.
It isn't, certainly. I had to coin it.
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you don't have to change [nanotechnology that does not use nanomachine] that is literally what it says, you don't have to come up with a word :P it is NOT a name!
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Sergio wrote: Page 13
15. old human men - Do you mean antique men?
I guess Pissaro is referring here to current humans, since the Venusians people are "evolved" humans they are certainly referring to homo sapiens as the antique men (Remember the picture in this chapter showing the evolution from humans to Venusians, the antique men could be the 3rd or 4th one, depends).

So I would suggest, instead of "antique men", something like rustic humans, sub-humans or outdated men (sub-humans seems like to fit perfectly).
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BeastSoulEyes wrote: So I would suggest, instead of "antique men", something like rustic humans, sub-humans or outdated men (sub-humans seems like to fit perfectly).
Not exactly. It seems to me that Venusians would consider themselves more evolved than ordinary humans. Thus, they would be post-humans (or something like that), while Martians and Ketherians would be antique men, the same of outdated, but considered more polite.
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From Dharko

"Hi friend, I´m happy that any1 could translate (apart of me) the cap80
Now I will compare my transduction with this and obtain the best of them.
I send You our job, is not complete, some globes are not translated, but, with the other, We´ll be able to finish it.

Here is the link:
http://www.megaupload.com/es/?d=KJ0LGAUY

At night I post the differences between both of them in the forum.

Pd. : Already We are in the cap.81. Xau!!"

We have a Spanish script now. Let's begin the Spanish to English translation!
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Post by ID01 »

I'm going to add some input in the missing panels.

Format: anything between quotation are things I don't understand completely. They are usually the Hiragana and Katakana. Which, supposedly, the easy part for non-Japanese speaking user. I am a little too lazy to read the dictionary and figure everything out. However I'm quite flute with Kanji reading.

PS: I'm a very slow Japanese typer. Which does make this take a lot more time then I expected.



Page 2:

>
[ Common citizen verse Government power ] "will become a " opposing theory
<


Note: I don't quite understand what "ができてしまいましたからねエ" means, but this feel alright.

Page 4:

Bottom right:
>
Even though we know that Venus don't have sufficient natural resources, we can tell that they are especially advance in the field of biology
<

Note: I'm pretty sure about this one.


Bottom left:
>
One example is their Nano-machince technology. Thanks to them, immortality have been archived over 200 years ago.
<

Note: "そのひとつである" basically means "One is", and of course, ナノマシン means "Nano-machine".


Page 5:

Bottom right:
>
They guards their biology technology like top secret. However, unlike other country, even down to daily products are made by such technology.
<

Note: Pretty sure about this one.

Bottom left:

>
Only recently, we have found rumor of their plan where creating a spaceship out of biological material become a possibility!
<

Note: Pretty sure, but it could also be "Their newest design" rather then "Their newest rumored plan".


Bottom middle:

>
Takoshii


GUZAISO of the BISAROKURIE Transporation Class biological structure
<

Note: ビサロクリエのグザイソした means GUZAISO of the BISAROKURIE. Which I don't actually know that it means, but there are no real room of error on this one even with a dictionary. Also, it should be "Props creature" in a literal sense, however I think "biological structure" meet the feeling of the sentenses a lot better.
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Translation 80 - Parte 1 de 2

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Here is my translation Spanish-English, comparing too the other translation posted before. The chapters were in bad order (I fixed it).
Tomorrow the second part (I am sleepy) :

FIRST LINE ==> ORIGINAL TRANSLATION
SECOND LINE ==> MY TRANSLATION

Phase 80
Title: Promise [ORIGINAL TRANSLATION]
Title: LIE [MY TRANSLATION]

P2:
J Gerambo (JG thereafter): 3 days have passed since the historic victory of the Space Angels from A Block
J Gerambo (JG thereafter): 3 days have passed since the historic victory of the Space Angels from A Block

JG: and once in danger of cancellation, the 10th ZOTT has once again resumed
JG: and once that has been resolved an "imparciality" crysis, formally the 10th ZOTT has once again resumed...

JG: and now, the battle of Space Karate Alliance VS Venus Genome Kingdom is about to start!
JG: and now, the battle of Space Karate Alliance VS Venus Genome Kingdom is about to start!

square:
The history until now...


P2:
ZOTT The 9th day B Block Semi-Finals
ZOTT The 9th day - "B Block" Semi-Finals

JG: The audience is already cheering!
JG: Please hear that! The audience is already cheering!

Audience 1: don’t stop the tournament this time!
Audience 1: You must be imparcial this time!

A2: [no idea, cant read the scans]
A2: Show us karate blows!! (or hits)

A3: crush the venus people!!!
A3: crush the venus people!!!

JG: because of too little numbers, the audience has gathered together in one place
JG: The truth is that... this is [the coliseum] a little empty, so, We request to the audience that gathered together in

one place, however...

JG: ah….shouldn’t have broadcasted this, huh?
JG: well….apparently They are all, huh?

JG: however, we have never seen an audience that is so one-sided
JG: however, we have never seen an audience that is so one-sided

JG: the Space Angels and Jupiter fans are cheering for the Space Karate Alliance
JG: the "Space Angels and Jupiter" fans are cheering for the "Space Karate Alliance".

MR. HOPPER: ???
MR. HOPPER: and thus it is only natural that Venus should fit into the “bad guys” role.


P3
C or JG: after yesterday’s spectacular elimination rounds, Space Karate has filled up 2 more spots
C or JG: From the notables reserves of player´s selection´s, 2 names have been included to the Space Karate

forces!!

C: and they are Taraba from Supercrustaceous Karate and Rakan from Armor Piercing Karate
C: and they are: "Taraba" from SuperDomocrustaceous Karate and "Rakan" from Armor Piercing Karate.

Zekka: then there is a condition to let this guy in too
Zekka: The inclusion of Taraba is OK, but there is some conditions...

Zekka: the “way” and idealism and etc….I hate those “strict” stuff
Zekka: ...also will enter this guy!!

Rakan: thank you for your special treatment…
Rakan: thank you for your special treatment… For the gloryyyy...!!

JG: Rakan leaves an impression that makes people think that he is [non-serious and careless]
JG: Rakan leaves an impression that makes people think that he is selfish, but...

JG: why does Zekka let him join the team?

C: Rakan is a well known assassin in the underground world… his assassination techniques cannot be taken lightly
C: Rakan is a well known assassin in the underground world… his assassination techniques cannot be taken lightly

C: and also, because his behavior is too (going to leave the word blank, see note), the underground world is also

staying away from him.
C: and also, because his behavior [STYLE] is too ANORMAL, the underground world is also ALIENATING TO HIM.


P4
C: The opponent is seed team Genome Kingdom
C: Of one form or another, here is the Venus team "the Genome Republic"

C: in the face of the strongest challenger ever, how will this battle turn out?!
C: in the face of the strongest challenger ever, how will this battle turn out?!

JG: Venus seems to be a place that relies on genetic manipulation of organics as the main power
JG: Venus seems to be a place that relies on genetic manipulation of strange organic creatures as their main power

JG: however, no matter what enhancement, can they still win against cyborg space karatekas?
JG: however, no matter what enhancement, can they still win against cyborg space karatekas?

C: Good question!
C: Good question, well...

C: I am not an expert on this type of knowledge, but let me first explain the background history of venus
C: This is not my speciality, but here it could be useless to them. let me first explain the background history of

Venus.

C: as everyone knows, the planet Venus is extremely scarce in resources, but nanotechnology is very advanced.
C: And representing the pinnacle of nanotechnology, 200 years ago, the Berserker and Methuselynation was

created.

P5
C: And then, because of Ladder and the limitation on using nanotechnology, Venus felt threatened.
C: meanwhile, because of "Ladder treat", the limitation on using nanotechnology was regulated drastically, and,

because the crisys sensation, They requested help to Venus.

C: so then they started development of bioengineering, calling it [nanotechnology that does not use nanomachines]
(note: inside [ ] is just using the original [], the stuff inside is correct)
C: so then they started development of bioengineering, calling it [nanotechnology that does not use nanomachines]

C: using the (something happened in ES 470, a great biological incident?) as the point, Venus pushed a

modification to the law that allowed the production and consumption of biological objects* and pseudo-humans
C: In ES 470, taking advantage of the BIO HAZZARD, (a great biological incident, yes) as the point, Venus pushed a

modification to the law that allowed the production and consumption of biological objects* and pseudo-humans


C: The Venusians, also did bioengineering on themselves and now the most common form of a Venusians are egg-

shaped*
C: The Venusians, achieve naturally the "auto-remodelation" on themselves by means of bioengineering, and now

the most common and popular form of a Venusians is the egg-shaped [Humptey Dumptey]*

C: The bioengineering technology are protected by patents and copies are not allowed; the products includes from

transportation tools and buildings to daily consumer products.
???

C: Currently, there are rumors that they will even be using biological organism as space craft and space colonies.
Inside the Box: (need scans to see how the name spells), created from (name, need scan) as a transportation tool.
???

Footnotes: biological objects: a man-made thing from genetic engineering for a purpose. Even though it is created

using human genetics, it is considered by law a consumer product and therefore it does not have any right.
Footnotes 1: "Humptey Dumptey": popular history for children about an egg alive that falls of a wall, here they make

reference to their shapes: rounded hands and short arms.
Footnotes 2: "OBJECTETRE", is a contraction of french words for resume: a "object-creature", this means, a

biological ¿been?, that is used for an only purpose: to be used like a tool.


P6
Gerambo: taking the victory from the hand of military superpower Jupiter federation 4 consecutive times is not

something that can be taken lightly!
Gerambo: The military superpower Jupiter federation imitated these military matters, for that reason, They weren´t

invited to the last 4 consecutive championships!!

JG: the leaders of evolution of mankind, the Republic of Venus representative, Genome Kingdom (that is the name of

the venus team, right?), is a team that is worth to look forward to!
JG: the leaders of evolution of universal mankind advances quickly. The Republic of Venus representative, Genome

Kingdom!!! , is a team that is worth to look forward to! The expectation grows!!

JG: The vanguards of the Space Karate Alliance have already entered
JG: The vanguards of the Space Karate Alliance have already entered!!

JG: Taraba … Toji and Rakkan!
JG: Taraba … Toji and... Rakkan!!


P7
Taraba: I said that me alone is enough already!
Taraba: I said that me alone is enough already!

Toji: no matter what, the opponent is still a seed team… let us not be careless
Toji: we will provide support from the back
Rakkan: me…me too!?

C: from the torchbearer to the first mate, it seems like the Karate team is being serious!
JG: but still, Zekka is nowhere to be seen.
JG: from looking at the conflict between zekka and the Venusians, we would have thought that Zekka will be leading

the charge...

Zekka: hnng!
Zekka: mmm!

Zekka: only for being made fun of and they expect me to be “waaawaaa” crying and rushing out
Zekka: There is no way I would be doing something so uncool.
Zekka: cannon fodders opponents are best left for my subordinates

P8-9
Ygrek: Are you hungry, (name, need scan)
Igrek: I am hungry, Alduina (or Arduina, the same)

P10:
Ygrek: I will give you your live preys soon...
Igrek: I will obtain inmediatly and with allmy energy this trophy.

Igrek: Vigorta!
Igrek: Shishu Face!


P11
C: and they are here!!! Venus Special-Made Monsters!
C: and they are here!!! Venus Giant Monsters!

C: from looking at the first entrance, they give us a impression of powerful melee attackers. Homme-du-feu seems

like he is commanding from the back

C: from looking at the first entrance, they give us a impression of powerful melee attackers. Homme-du-feu seems

like he is commanding from the back


P12
Pissarro: finally it starts…
Pissarro: it seems that it starts…

Pissarro: I am thankful of you, olympe.

Pissarro: in terms of combat biological organism, HC-BE583-Y526 only had a below mediocre combat ability; but

you gave him the will to battle, and thus making him develop a high intelligence and strong adaptability.
Pissarro: in terms of combat biological organism, THE MODEL KINOCÉFALO HC-BE583-Y526 only had a below

mediocre combat ability; but you gave him the will to battle, and thus making him develop a high intelligence and

strong adaptability.

Same: olympe, this was all because of you
Same: It was your contribution, Olympe.

Footnote: Kynokephalos werewolf. In greek mythology, it is someone who has a face of a dog, (after this, it is

something about Hindu mythology)


P13:
Pissarro speaking of which, it is very ironic… his wish was to give you freedom.
Pissarro: do you even know what the meaning of [freedom] is?
JOJOJO

Olympe: master Pisarro, please tell me
Olympe: LORD Pisarro, please tell me...

Olympe: We getting into this situation… and the pain he experienced
Olympe: You made us what we are… the pain he suffer...

Olympe: did you know beforehand and that was the reason you used me as his education tool?

Pissarro: It is within my plans!
Pissarro: Absolutly!! everything was calculated!!

Pissarro: … If I said something like this, would you have believed it?!
Pissarro: … I wonder If I said something like this to You, would you understand it!?


P14:
Pissarro: from the way the question are asked, you can notice!
Pissarro: our conversation may actually be all just lies to cover our real intent.

Pissarro: the first thing a newborn child learns to do is to lie
Pissarro: the first thing a newborn child learns to do is a manipulated lie.

Pissarro: you were originally designed to be a plaything for antique men, you are a device that is a lie in itself. (note:

changed to antique men, it is referring the normal humans, not the genetically manipulated ones)
Pissarro: you were originally designed to be a plaything for THE MEN OF THE EX-HUMANITY, A LIE HAS BEEN

PLANNED, AND YOU ARE A TOOL FOR MAKE IT.

Pissarro: Homme-du-feu already knows and felt this fact…

Pissarro: and that is why he will not believe in whatever you say

Olympe: how can it be…
Olympe: I see...


P15
Pissarro: that child’s wish is the representation that he does not trust you.
Pissarro: it is the same as saying [Don’t need Olympe anymore]

P16
C: taraba rushes towards his opponent
SFX: CRASH!!


Tomorrow the rest, Xau.
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Post by auto520 »

My poor english... i can read japanese.

Title is LIE!

square:
The history until now...
*semi-finals begin.

P3
Zekka: then there is a condition to let this guy in too
Zekka: The inclusion of Taraba is OK, but there is some conditions...
*Zekka: One condition to let Taraba in, enter this guy too!

Zekka: the “way” and idealism and etc….I hate those “strict” stuff
Zekka: ...also will enter this guy!!
*Zekka: “ways” and aspirations etc….I hate those “strict” stuff

JG: Rakan leaves an impression that makes people think that he is [non-serious and careless]
JG: Rakan leaves an impression that makes people think that he is selfish, but...
*JG: Rakan leaves a strong impression that he is [careless & arbitrary] person.

P4
(2 sentences! not 1 cover . care.)
C: as everyone knows, the planet Venus is extremely scarce in resources, but nanotechnology is very advanced.
C: And representing the pinnacle of nanotechnology, 200 years ago, the Berserker and Methuselynation was created.

P5
C: And then, because of Ladder and the limitation on using nanotechnology, Venus felt threatened.
C: meanwhile, because of "Ladder treat", the limitation on using nanotechnology was regulated drastically, and, because the crisys sensation, They requested help to Venus.
*C: meanwhile, because of "Ladder treat", the limitation on using nanotechnology was regulated drastically, Venusfelt threatened.

C: so then they started development of bioengineering, calling it [nanotechnology that does not use nanomachines]
(note: inside [ ] is just using the original [], the stuff inside is correct)
C: so then they started development of bioengineering, calling it [nanotechnology that does not use nanomachines]
*C: so then they started development the [nanotechnology] way of bioengineering. (Means like this)

Inside the Box: (?TAGUSI?), created by Pissarro as a transportation tool.
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The second part of Phase 80

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The second part of Phase 80 (pag 17-31) :

FIRST LINE ==> ORIGINAL TRANSLATION
SECOND LINE ( * ) ==> MY TRANSLATION


P17
Taraba: guuooo~ (I think that is the sound….need scans to confirm)
*Taraba: guuooo!?

C: the flying kick created an explosion?! No… that is not right!
*C: Did the power of his flying kick creates an explosion? t... that´s right!

C: there are no damage below the scales of begol (something like that, the name, need scans)
*C: there are no damage below the scales of VIGORTA!!

Pissarro: the scales of (name) and (name) contains metallic hydrogen
*Pissarro: the scales of VIGORTA and SHISHU-FACE contains metallic-hydrogen...

Pissarro: It is a biological reactive armor*
*Pissarro: ...that is like a biological reactive armor!*

Footnotes:
*Metal Hydrogen: a type of explosive
*Reactive armor: using the energy from explosive material in an armor to cancel out the damage caused by

enemies.


P18
C: this time it is bio missiles!
*C: Now it is bio missiles!!

Pissarro: something of a sidenote, by creating organism inside the arena
*Pissarro: By the way, by creating organisms inside the arena...

Pissarro: even if it exceeds the 5 person limit, it is not against the rules.
*Pissarro: ...even if it exceeds the 5 person limit, it is not against the rules!!

*Taraba: mmnn!! (effort)

P19
*C: Toji’s punch created a shockwave and it dealt with all the missiles
*C: beautiful teamwork!!

P20
C: (name) is rushing towards Toji
*C: SHISHU-FACE faces to Toji

P21
C: It is a Laser beam attack~~!!
*C: It is an lightning offensive !!

Toji: uuuh~ this power…
*Toji: mmm... this power…

Toji: it is more powerful than anomaly’s cannon
*Toji: ...it is more powerful than anomaly’s líbido cannon

Pissarro: Bio Gas beam [flambeur]
*Pissarro: Bio Gas beam... that is a sure bet!!

Pissarro: the theory behind it is simple, heavy hydrogen fluoride laser.
*Pissarro: the theory behind it is simple, A heavy hydrogen fluoride laser!!

Footnote: (might have to wiki this, heavy hydrogen fluoride laser)

P22
C: in the other side, Taraba is withstanding a barrage of fingertip cannon from (name of the monster)
*C: Vigorta now rush from Its fingers a concentration of fire´s guns to Taraba!!

JG: are there anymore thing that are impossible?!
*JG: Whta kind of things they build now!?

C: I have heard that they can match modern weapons… but have never thought that they would be this powerful.
*C: I have heard that they can match modern weapons… but have never thought that they would be this powerful!!

*Pissarro: it is a modified version of (need to work on the word…will revise)

*Pissarro: In close range, it can have a more powerful piercing ability than a 100 mm ramjet cannon

*Taraba: hah!

*Footnote: will work on it…

P23
Taraba: Super armor three style technique (hey, I try....translating the technique name)
*Taraba: Super shell battle model three!!

*Taraba: an attack without a soul cannot defeat me!!

P24
(no speech)

P25
Taraba: (technique name…need scan)
*Taraba: zuu gaa!! Lo logré!!

P26
*JG: Taraba is magnific!! He squashed to Vigorta !!

Pissarro: hng… it was only a spendable for testing the power of the opponent.
*Pissarro: mmm... after all, it is a form for testing the rival forces and discount pieces of the game, also to create

confusion.

Pizarro: Homme-du-feu should be about to make a move now
*Pizarro: Homme-du-feu should begin to wake up very soon.

P27
Rakkan: hihihi, I killed you~~!!
little letter: This time it is not an illusion!!

Rakkan: no fun, you are no fun!!
Rakkan: Simple!! Really very simple!!

P28
Igrek: I have been waiting for your ambush...
Rakkan: what!?

Rakkan: but then, this is!?
*Rakkan: Noo!!, what is it!?

Ygrek: Karate-kas seems to be very proficient at destroying hard stuffs
*Ygrek: Karate-kas seems to be very proficient at destroying hard stuffs, but...

Igrek: but then, how about soft stuff?
*Igrek: ...how about soft stuffs?

Rakkan: ooouuh~ I can’t resist…
Rakkan: boobs…my beloved things…mmmm (I agree)


P29
Ygrek: ok… you have been waiting for a long time
*Igrek: ok… I have been very patient

Ygrek: you can disable your camouflage… (name)
*Igrek: Lets finish with this farce... Alduina.

Ygrek: and eat at your hearts content
*Igrek: And later we will devour!!

Ygrek: like the mouth of hell, devour everything
Igrek: with the purpose of that the hell devour and puts on weight!!

P30-31
Ygrek: honestly, I envy your ability to eat anything

Ygrek: if I had a stomach that could digest everything...

Ygrek: ...I would be one with Olympe...!!

Shiddo Team, that force doesn't have bottom !!

To be continued...

--------------------------

Fin. I´m according with the result, so, use it as You wish, Xau.
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Re: Translation 80 - Parte 1 de 2

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I hope it is not to confusing now.
And I take back what I said earlier, jap.--> span.--> eng. is too hard, maybe we have more luck with a jap.--> eng. translator next time.



Phase 80

FIRST LINE ==> ORIGINAL TRANSLATION
SECOND LINE ( * ) ==> MY TRANSLATION
The line I like better is fat

Title: LIE

P2:
J Gerambo (JG thereafter): Three days have passed since the historic victory of the Space Angels from A Block

JG: and once in danger of cancellation, the 10th ZOTT has once again resumed
JG: and once that has been resolved an "imparciality" crysis, formally the 10th ZOTT has once again resumed...
---> impartiality?
---> we should combine both lines, maybe like: and once in danger of cancellation due to a crysis in impartiality, the 10th ZOTT was resumed again

JG: and now, the battle of Space Karate Alliance VS Venus Genome Kingdom is about to start!

square:
The history until now...



P2:
ZOTT The 9th day B Block Semi-Finals
ZOTT The 9th day - "B Block" Semi-Finals

JG: The audience is already cheering!
JG: Please hear that! The audience is already cheering!

Audience 1: don’t stop the tournament this time!
Audience 1: You must be imparcial this time!
---> Well then it has to be the first line since it is a more direct translation, isn't it? Also, "impartial"

A2: [no idea, cant read the scans]
A2: Show us karate blows!! (or hits)

A3: crush the venus people!!!
A3: crush the venus people!!!


JG: because of too little numbers, the audience has gathered together in one place
JG: The truth is that... this is [the coliseum] a little empty, so, We request to the audience that gathered together in one place, however...

JG: ah….shouldn’t have broadcasted this, huh?
JG: well….apparently They are all, huh?
---> pretty different again. Hard to tell which one is original.


JG: however, we have never seen an audience that is so one-sided
JG: however, we have never seen an audience that is so one-sided

JG: the Space Angels and Jupiter fans are cheering for the Space Karate Alliance
JG: the "Space Angels and Jupiter" fans are cheering for the "Space Karate Alliance".

MR. HOPPER: ???
MR. HOPPER: and thus it is only natural that Venus should fit into the “bad guys” role.


P3
C or JG: after yesterday’s spectacular elimination rounds, Space Karate has filled up 2 more spots
C or JG: From the notables reserves of player´s selection´s, 2 names have been included to the Space Karate forces!!
---> Has to be JG, he says all that team stuff
---> The rest is very different again. Maybe: after yesterday’s spectacular elimination rounds, "Space Karate" has filled up 2 more spots from the notable reserves

C: and they are Taraba from Supercrustaceous Karate and Rakan from Armor Piercing Karate
C: and they are: "Taraba" from SuperDomocrustaceous Karate and "Rakan" from Armor Piercing Karate.

Zekka: then there is a condition to let this guy in too
Zekka: The inclusion of Taraba is OK, but there is one condition...

Zekka: the “way” and idealism and etc….I hate those “strict” stuff
Zekka: ...also will enter this guy!!
---> according to auto520 Zekka says both lines: ... one condition: this guy will also join the team. "Way", "idealism"/"Aspiration", I hate those strict stuff.

Rakan: thank you for your special treatment…
Rakan: thank you for your special treatment… For the gloryyyy...!!

JG: Rakan leaves an impression that makes people think that he is [non-serious and careless]
JG: Rakan leaves an impression that makes people think that he is selfish, but...
---> again according to auto520: Rakan leaves an impression that makes people think that he is selfish (and arbitrary), so...


JG: why does Zekka let him join the team?

C: Rakan is a well known assassin in the underground world… his assassination techniques cannot be taken lightly
C: Rakan is a well known assassin in the underground world… his assassination techniques cannot be taken lightly

C: and also, because his behavior is too (going to leave the word blank, see note), the underground world is also staying away from him.
C: and also, because his behavior [STYLE] is too ANORMAL, the underground world is also ALIENATING TO HIM.


P4
C: The opponent is seed team Genome Kingdom
C: Of one form or another, here is the opponent, the seed teem Venus team "the Genome Republic" (peroid?)

C: in the face of the strongest challenger ever, how will this battle turn out?!
C: in the face of the strongest challenger ever, how will this battle turn out?!


JG: Venus seems to be a place that relies on genetic manipulation of organics as the main power
JG: Venus seems to be a place that relies on genetic manipulation of strange organic creatures as their main power

JG: however, no matter what enhancement, can they still win against cyborg space karatekas?
JG: however, no matter what enhancement, can they still win against cyborg space karatekas?


C: Good question!
C: Good question, well...

C: I am not an expert on this type of knowledge, but let me first explain the background history of venus
C: This is not my speciality, but here it could be useless to them. let me first explain the background history of Venus.
---> both are ok...

C: as everyone knows, the planet Venus is extremely scarce in resources, but nanotechnology is very advanced.
C: And representing the pinnacle of nanotechnology, 200 years ago, the Berserker and Methuselynation was created.


P5
C: And then, because of Ladder and the limitation on using nanotechnology, Venus felt threatened.
C: meanwhile, because of "Ladder treat", the limitation on using nanotechnology was regulated drastically, and, because the crisys sensation, They requested help to Venus.
---> content too different

C: so then they started development of bioengineering, calling it [nanotechnology that does not use nanomachines]
(note: inside [ ] is just using the original [], the stuff inside is correct)
C: so then they started the development of bioengineering, calling it [nanotechnology that does not use nanomachines]

C: using the (something happened in ES 470, a great biological incident?) as the point, Venus pushed a modification to the law that allowed the production and consumption of biological objects* and pseudo-humans
C: In ES 470, taking advantage of the BIO HAZZARD, (a great biological incident, yes) as the point, Venus pushed a modification to the law that allowed the production and consumption of biological objects* and pseudo-humans


C: The Venusians, also did bioengineering on themselves and now the most common form of a Venusians are egg-shaped*
C: The Venusians, achieve naturally the "auto-remodelation" on themselves by means of bioengineering, and now the most common and popular form of a Venusians is the egg-shaped [Humptey Dumptey]*
-----> combination: The Venusians also did bioengineering on themselves and naturally achieved the "auto-remodelation", and now the most common and popular form of a Venusians is the egg-shaped [Humptey Dumptey]*

C: The bioengineering technology are protected by patents and copies are not allowed (period) the products includes from transportation tools and buildings to daily consumer products.
???
---> ... The range/ array of products reaches from transportation tools and buildings to daily consumer products.

C: Currently, there are rumors that they will even be using biological organismS as (for) space craft (spacecraftS) and space colonies.
Inside the Box: (need scans to see how the name spells*), created from (name, need scan**) as a transportation tool.
???
---> *: according to auto520: (?TAGUSI?), created by Pissarro as a transportation tool. (is Tagusi Taxi by any chance?? (means "cab", it would fit))

Footnotes: biological objects: a man-made thing from genetic engineering for a purpose. Even though it is created by using human genetics, it is considered by law a consumer product and therefore it does not have any right.
Footnotes 1: "Humptey Dumptey": popular history for children about an egg alive (a living egg) that falls of a wall, here they make reference to their shapes (shape): rounded hands (round bodies?) and short arms.
Footnotes 2: "OBJECTETRE", is a contraction of french words for resume: a "object-creature", this means, a biological ¿been? (being), that is used for an only (only one) purpose: to be used like a tool.

---> two times "used", it needs a little polishing


P6
JG: taking the victory from the hand of the military superpower "Jupiter Federation" 4 (four) consecutive times is not something that can be taken lightly!
JG: The military superpower Jupiter federation imitated these military matters, for that reason, They weren´t invited to the last 4 consecutive championships!!


JG: the leaders of evolution of mankind, the Republic of Venus representative, Genome Kingdom (that is the name of the venus team, right?), is a team that is worth to look forward to!
JG: the leaders of evolution of universal mankind advances quickly. The Republic of Venus representative, Genome Kingdom!!! , is a team that is worth to look forward to! The expectation grows!!
---> The leaders of evolution of universal mankind advances quickly. The representatives of the Republic of Venus, Genome Kingdom!!! A team that is worth to look forward to! The expectation grows!!



JG: The vanguards of the Space Karate Alliance have already entered
JG: The vanguards of the Space Karate Alliance have already entered!!

JG: Taraba … Toji and Rakkan!
JG: Taraba … Toji and... Rakkan!!


P7
Taraba: I said that me alone is enough already!
Taraba: I said that me alone is enough already!


Toji: no matter what, the opponent is still a seed team… let us not be careless
Toji: we will provide support from the back
Rakkan: me…me too!?

C: from the torchbearer to the first mate, it seems like the Karate team is being serious!
JG: but still, Zekka is nowhere to be seen.
JG: from looking at the conflict between zekka and the Venusians, we would have thought that Zekka will be leading the charge...


Zekka: hnng!
Zekka: mmm!
---> anyway... ;)


Zekka: only for being made fun of and they expect me to be “waaawaaa” crying and rushing out
---> Only for being made fun of they expect me to be “waaawaaa” crying and rushing out?
---> is this sentence correct?...

Zekka: There is no way I would be doing something so uncool.
Zekka: cannon fodders (fodder) opponents are best left for my subordinates


P8-9
Ygrek: Are you hungry, Aldina(?)?
Igrek: I am hungry, Alduina (or Arduina, the same)

P10:
Ygrek: I will give you your live preys soon... (your living prey?)

Igrek: I will obtain inmediatly and with allmy energy this trophy.
---> I will obtain this trophy with all my energy immediately.

Igrek: Vigorta!
Igrek: Shishu Face!



P11
C: and they are here!!! Venus Special-Made Monsters!
C: and they are here!!! Venus Giant Monsters!
---> combination: And they are here!!! / And here they are!!! Venus Giant Special-Made Monsters!

C: from looking at the first entrance, they give us a (an) impression of powerful melee attackers. Homme-du-feu seems like he is commanding (them?) from the back

C: from looking at the first entrance, they give us a impression of powerful melee attackers. Homme-du-feu seems like he is commanding from the back


P12
Pissarro: finally it starts…
Pissarro: it seems that it starts…
---> hm...

Pissarro: I am thankful of you, olympe.

Pissarro: in terms of combat biological organism, HC-BE583-Y526 only had a below mediocre combat ability; but you gave him the will to battle, and thus making him develop a high intelligence and strong adaptability.
Pissarro: in terms of combat biological organism, THE MODEL KINOCÉFALO HC-BE583-Y526 only had a below mediocre combat ability (only had a combat ability below average); but you gave him the will to battle, and thus making him develop a high intelligence and strong adaptability.

Same: olympe, this was all because of you
Same: It was your contribution, Olympe.
---> both are good...

Footnote: Kynokephalos werewolf. In greek mythology, it is someone who has a face of a dog, (after this, it is something about Hindu mythology)


P13:
Pissarro speaking of which, it is very ironic… his wish was to give you freedom.
Pissarro: do you even know what the meaning of [freedom] is?

JOJOJO

Olympe: master Pisarro, please tell me
Olympe: LORD Pisarro, please tell me...

Olympe: We getting into this situation… and the pain he experienced
Olympe: You made us what we are… the pain he sufferS...

Olympe: did you know (it) beforehand and that was the reason you used me as his education tool?

Pissarro: It is within my plans!
Pissarro: Absolutly!! everything was calculated!!
--> first sounds more chilly, second more triumphant. How would Pissaro put it? I vote for the second one


Pissarro: … If I said something like this, would you have believed it?!
Pissarro: … I wonder If I said something like this to You, would you understand (would you've understood it?) it!?


P14:
Pissarro: from the way the question are asked, you can notice!
Pissarro: our conversation may actually be all just lies to cover our real intent.
---> huh? too different

Pissarro: the first thing a newborn child learns to do is to lie
Pissarro: the first thing a newborn child learns to do is a manipulated lie.
---> ... is to manipulate (others) through lies.

Pissarro: you were originally designed to be a plaything for antique men, you are a device that is a lie in itself. (note: changed to antique men, it is referring the normal humans, not the genetically manipulated ones)
Pissarro: you were originally designed to be a plaything for THE MEN OF THE EX-HUMANITY, A LIE HAS BEEN PLANNED, AND YOU ARE A TOOL FOR MAKE (making) IT.
---> a lie has been planned? what lie?

Pissarro: Homme-du-feu already knows and felt this fact…
---> Pissarro: Homme-du-feu already knows, he felt this fact…

Pissarro: and that is why he will not believe in whatever you say

Olympe: how can it be…
Olympe: I see...
---> don't know which one

P15
Pissarro: that child’s wish is the representation that he does not trust you.
Pissarro: it is the same as saying [Don’t need Olympe anymore]

P16
C: taraba rushes towards his opponent
SFX: CRASH!!


Rest later maybe but not today^^
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"And I take back what I said earlier, jap.--> span.--> eng. is too hard, maybe we have more luck with a jap.--> eng. translator next time."

OK Cailon, maybe You will have more luck next time "alone" :wink:

Im sorry for some words "bad writed", I am not expert in english ¿ok?

and, now You have are 2 options for compare...

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Hey! I'm really sorry, I didn't mean it that way. I did not want to insult you at all! Sorry if it sounded like that! :!:
You and newbieff did a great job by translating everything, your TL is even more exact. With "hard" I only ment the long process and the amount of work to do and already done by everyone. And that it is always better (means: commonly for every Scangoup) to have a direct TL. But until then I appreciate every single word of yours.
Also, it would be the last thing for me to do, to describe myself as an english- expert. My english is rather poor, I have to use a dictionary quite often.

So again: Sorry! (I hope I could clear this misunderstanding.)
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Ok, no problem, don´t worry. :wink:
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Let me comment Cailon’s last notes


1. Title – After reading the chapter, it is obvious that the noun should be plural in English, so it is supposed to be Lies.
2. Page 1 – This group has already beeen named Allied Space Karate Forces and also Space Karate Allies. I think that a third denomination will be too much.
3. Page 1 – The story until now… We are not referring to the narrative of past events, but to a piece of fiction.
4. Page 3 – Taraba’s group was previously entitled Supercrustaceous Karate.
5. Page 3 – Non-serious and careless. Selfish? I do believe that slovenly is more appropriate.
6. Page 3 - …his behavior is too abnormal, the underground… that is the correct spelling in English. As far as I could identify, anormal is the spelling in German, Portuguese, Spanish, Turkish, French… In short, anything but English.
7. Page 4 - …the Berserker and the Methuselyzation were created. Spelling and verbal conjugation.
8. Page 5 – Humpty Dumpty. This is the adopted spelling. It refers to a character in Lewis Carroll’s Alice’s Adventures in Wonderland – and, yes, the Venusias seem to have been inspired in him.
9. Page 5 – According to Babylon Dictionary, taxi in Japanese is タクシー (takushi)
10. Page 5 – Footnote 1: Humpty Dumpty”: popular story for children…
11. Page 5 – Footnote 2: …a biological being that has only one purpose: to be used like a tool.
12. Page 6 – Republic of Venus? But République Vénus has already been adopted.
13. Page 7 – In formal language, the sentence should be From the torchbearer and the first mate, it looks as if the karate team is being serious. Only a conjunction can join two clauses. The preposition like, here, violates the grammar rules. The verb is also wrong. Alternatively, we could write From the torchbearer and the first mate, it seems that the karate team is being serious. It is more colloquial, but still correct.
14. Page 7 – Is this sentence correct? – I do not think so. Two confusing. Honestly, it means nothing at all.
15. Pages 8-9 – The correct spelling is Alduína (note the acute accent). It refers to a witch in Portuguese folklore. The way Portuguese are fascinated with France, the presence of a Portuguese witch in a French environment is no surprise.
16. Page 10 – I will promptly obtain this trophy with all my energy. I believe this construction solves the problem.
17. Page 11 – Venus specially giant-made monsters!
18. Page 11 – Homme-du-Feu seems to be commanding them from the back. Otherwise the text is confusing.
19. Page 12 - …but you gave him the will to battle, thus making him… There is no reason to use the conjunction and here.
20. Page 12 – I must insist. It is true that the original text brings kynokephalos, but that is the Greek word. Three hipotheses: 1. The Japanese word repeats the Greek original, and once in English we are supposed to change for the English spelling (cynocephalus); 2. Pissarro intentionally uses the Greek form, and it must be maintained the Greek way; 3. Kishiro made a mistake, simply, and we must use the correct spelling (cynocephalus).
21. Page 13 – It seems to me that Olympe is a sort of bondservant, thus master would be more appropriate.
22. Page 13 – I wonder if I had said something like this to you, would you’ve understood it? Verbal tense.
23. Page 14 – Homme-du-Feu knows it already. He felt this fact… Structure and punctuation.
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Sergio wrote: 20. Page 12 – I must insist. It is true that the original text brings kynokephalos, but that is the Greek word. Three hipotheses: 1. The Japanese word repeats the Greek original, and once in English we are supposed to change for the English spelling (cynocephalus); 2. Pissarro intentionally uses the Greek form, and it must be maintained the Greek way; 3. Kishiro made a mistake, simply, and we must use the correct spelling (cynocephalus).
in my opinion it should be left in greek form. If it should be changed, then there (in RAW) would be a japanese word for "werewolf" not kynokephalos. Other option, that it is somehow related to Olympe as a greek word.
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Ok guys to get in between the translation for a bit.
Since my eyes roll when i need to scroll through 16 pages of translation material (little exaggerated) i thought of a new way to make it a bit easyer for all of us.
You may have seen it if you are a forum junky but take a look at this:

http://www.rippersanime.com/wiki/tiki-i ... ranslation

Yes its a wiki I'm trying to setup.
And while i was busy with that i thought: why not easy up by using it for the translation script also.
Everything in 1 webpage where everybody reads the same translation, modifications, etc.
The forums can surely be used to discuss items, but posting huge slabs of translated text is just....ugly and impractical.

So...

I want to try if this wiki method will go smoother.
You can register for an account that i need to verify.
I hope this works out as it save so much hassle and double work.
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what's the passcode to register ripper? :P
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Should be gone now :)
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cant register ...

first error is when im trying to write correct email..

second when im confirming correct email wrong code...

and the circle of evil closes..
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Possibly beefed the security too high.
Its fixed.
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Soon 30,000 page views...impressive.
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copy paste :D (http://www.rippersanime.com/wiki/tiki-i ... aved_msg=y)

I did some changes.
We definately need a new translation again at:
- p.02, JG
- p.03, Zekka
- p. 05, C (Hopper) (this is the most important one)

We need a bit QC everywhere plus the fat lines plus here ;):
- Olympe vs. Olymphe
- p.10: the names of the monsters
- p. 12 kynokephalos vs. cynocephalus
- p.26
- p.30-31

Well, and the remaining little errors are artistic licence of us scanlators I would say^^
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Cailon wrote:---> *: according to auto520: (?TAGUSI?), created by Pissarro as a transportation tool. (is Tagusi Taxi by any chance?? (means "cab", it would fit))
In this case Takoshi is a play of words. Tako is japanese for Octopus which it looks like. While Takkushi is the katakana the japanese use for Taxi. Also on that box it isn't "created", but gesigned by Pissarro. Any questions go back a few chapters to read what gesign means.
Cailon wrote:- Olympe vs. Olymphe
As far as I remember it's Olympe. All my searches for the katakana name ended up with the french name Olympe.

Page 30-31. Last line is Seeded team
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I just noticed that in the translation script both in this thread and on the translation wiki, the two venusian monsters are called Shishuface and Vigorta. I was under the impression, and I believe this was discussed in this thread earlier, that the names of the genome kingdom creatures should be Chichevace and Bicorne, based on a French legend of two monsters, one very thin that only ate honest women, and one very fat that ate only honest men (yay misogyny). This would fit with the overall french theme of venus in BAALO. just my two cents.
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