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Thanks to Sergio for the raws.
Since the text was spread here and there and confusing, I've put red numbers near each group of sentences in the raws.
I suggest to whom will have to edit the pages to download them from here:
http://www.mediafire.com/?54cz2sv4mszp7db
The numbers were put in a way so they can easily be deleted.

Pages 197-198

1. Diagram.
2. Everything about the Stealth Army.
3. The “Stealth Army” is composed of soldiers from the "NEW ORDER", established by Mbadi in ES 474. NEW ORDER is LADDER's exclusive army and can be authorized to operate beyond national borders under LADDER treaty jurisdiction. It’s the very first Solar System military unit to use optical stealth technology as standard-issue military gear. The most cutting-edge technology is used in this equipment.
4. STEALTH ARMY SUIT. The surface, composed of an elastic smart polymer, combined with a power support function, displays high movement efficiency.
5. STEALTH MODES. It has optical, electromagnetic, infrared, and acoustic stealth modes. Since it’s airtight, it can operate in space. It also has anti-radiation, anti-gas, and anti-germ functions as well.
6. For long periods of activity in space, it equips options like a backpack and so on.
7. SUBMACHINE GUN. Inside an air-tight structure, a submachine gun is employed since it exchanges firepower for comfort and safety.
8. The Stealth Army rappelling down the orbital elevator.
9. ASSAULT RIFLE. It has armor-piercing efficiency and can fare better against skilled cyborgs.
10. SPECIAL MILITARY GEAR 1. HIGH ORDER company commander Tzykrow's suit, unit under Mbadi's direct control. The mask design differs greatly.
11. THE THRUSTERS USED IN SPACE ACTIVITY
12. SPECIAL MILITARY GEAR 2. Unit 405, a special anti-terrorism unit. Powerful even for NEW ORDER standards, it has been seen operating efficiently during the mission to recover Olympus space port.
13. ADJUSTABLE SIZE. The wearer can personalize it in case he's wearing a Stealth Suit for the first time. The suit automatically changes form and volume fitting the wearer's height and constitution. After this, it is preserved until initialized.
14. INNER SUIT. The wearer has on a thin inner suit, similar to tights. This one has a group of sensors monitoring the wearer condition and transmitting the data to the shell suit.
15. Even with a short body build like Alita, it is wearable without problems.
16. ACTIVITIES. It boasts brilliant war records: it was struck by Caerula, decapitated by Zekka's motorbike, kicked by Alita, and so on.
17. Stealth Army being eaten by a Venusian Octo-Taxi.


Page 199

0. in every single page: NG life theatre

1. Last episode.
2. Biography of ordinary soldiers.
3. Farewell, my friends!!!
4. At last the ZOTT finals have ended!!
5. In the backstage...
6. ZEKKA
7. RETIRES!!
8. Ohii
9. i
10. i
11. i
12. Lets' toooast!!
13. Aaah, how wonderful!!
14. Stealth Army waiting room.
15. Our misery caused by Zekka is finally over.
16. That bastard, what did he have against us?
17. Every time he appeared, it was only bad news...


Page 200

1. First time Zekka appears (Chapter 59).
2. That's me.
3. This is me.
4. Chapter 60.
5. That's me!
6. That's me.
7. Chapter 71.
8. But evil has perished already!
9. The world is ours!!
10. Hurrayyy.
11. To the attention of the NG platoon!!


Page 201

1. Arrest Director Mbadi at once!!
2. roll
3. Arresting the Director...
4. No way, impossible.
5. Uhmmmm
6. Well then...
7. Shall we go?
8. kaclack
9. Commander, are we going!?
10. It's a sure-fire death flag!!


Page 202

1. FOOLS!!
2. Did you forget our mission in life!?
3. It's to do things others can't do!!
4. Commandeeeer!!
5. We were wrong!!
6. To us, the happiness of a normal man...is useless!!
7. When we die, we die together, commander!!
8. STEALTH ARMY CORPS, NG FIFTH PLATOON
9. NOT A SINGLE RETURNEE!!
10. A bouquet to the nameless heroes!!
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- Octaxi. Takoshii in the original text. It's a pun on Tako (octopus) and Taxi so I combined the two words too.
Perhaps, has it got an official translation?
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Ah man....
Now i have to get off my lazy ass and do a volume release...

Nah, great work Guren!
Thanks for the assistance in translating.
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You're welcome.
Waiting for proofreading.
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Guren wrote:- Octaxi. Takoshii in the original text. It's a pun on Tako (octopus) and Taxi so I combined the two words too.
Perhaps, has it got an official translation?
In Last Order, volume 13, Sans Angel, page 37, that "vehicle" was translated as takoshi, combining tako and takkushi.
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Then it was not translated at all.
lol

Tell me if you want it as takoshi and I will change it.
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Guren wrote:Then it was not translated at all.
lol

Tell me if you want it as takoshi and I will change it.
I believe we should maintain a standard, so I vote for takoshi.
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Ok, updated.
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I believe we should maintain a standard, so I vote for takoshi.
I vote for Octo-Taxi... since that is the official Viz translation. BTW, I'll have the corrections tomorrow.
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Page 197-198
5. STEALTH FUNCTION. It has optic, electromagnetic, infra-red rays, noise stealth function. Being airtight, it can act in space. It owns anti-radiation, anti-gas, anti-germs functions as well. (plural noun; missing comma)
12. SPECIAL MILITARY GEAR 2. Unit 405, a special anti-terrorism unit. Powerful even among NEWORDER, it has been seen easily succeeding in the operation to recover Olympus spaceport. (past participle; structure)
13. VARIABLE SIZE. The wearer personalize it in case he's wearing a Stealth Suit for the first time. The suit automatically changes form and volume fitting the wearer's height and constitution. After this, it is preserved until initialized. (spelling)
14. INNER SUIT. The wearer has on a thin inner suit like tights. [Either it is my limited English or this text makes no sense.]
17. Stealth Army being eaten by a Venusian takoshi. (gentilic)

Page 199
17. Every time he appeared, it was only bad news... (missing comma; pronoun)

Page 201
kaclack [what is that?]
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Burning Angel wrote: I vote for Octo-Taxi... since that is the official Viz translation. BTW, I'll have the corrections tomorrow.
The problem is that we will always have differences with Viz once our version is released before. At the same time, Viz insists in calling Olympe an android, although it goes against the good sense in any language I know. Andro is the Greek prefix for male human, while gyno is the Greek prefix for female human. The problem started when the coiner confounded anthropo (man, the species) and andro (man, the gender). It seems he should have said anthropoid, referring to a humanlike robot, instead of android, a malelike robot).

I agree we should preserve Viz nomenclature when referring to characters, or we will generate confusion (supposing the readers do buy Viz's version in the end). The alternative would be to forget Viz's eccentricities (just to be polite) and preserve the original nomenclature.
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The problem is that we will always have differences with Viz once our version is released before. At the same time, Viz insists in calling Olympe an android, although it goes against the good sense in any language I know. Andro is the Greek prefix for male human, while gyno is the Greek prefix for female human. The problem started when the coiner confounded anthropo (man, the species) and andro (man, the gender). It seems he should have said anthropoid, referring to a humanlike robot, instead of android, a malelike robot).
Like it or not, android is still the generic term in English for human-like robot (male or female). In fact, the only time I ever heard the term Gynoid was in a GITS:SAC episode...
I agree we should preserve Viz nomenclature when referring to characters, or we will generate confusion (supposing the readers do buy Viz's version in the end). The alternative would be to forget Viz's eccentricities (just to be polite) and preserve the original nomenclature.
In Japanese, it's Takoshi... In the Viz edition, it's Octo-Taxi... In the Spanish version, it's Pulpaxi... probably in every version, they translate it to their own language... the absurd thing to do (if we are translating it to English) is to just leave it in Japanese, since most English speakers don't speak Japanese...

If anything, we should either translate Octo-Taxi into English, since English seems to be LADDER's official language, or French, since the Republic of Venus is francophonic... I don't think Japanese is used much in Kishiro's universe...
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Burning Angel wrote: Like it or not, android is still the generic term in English for human-like robot (male or female). In fact, the only time I ever heard the term Gynoid was in a GITS:SAC episode...
I agree, but as you are aware, generic does not mean correct. I know I am stubborn, but I cannot see why to insist with wrong terms.
[Probably, Masamune Shirow used ガイノイド (gainoido).]
Burning Angel wrote: In Japanese, it's Takoshi... In the Viz edition, it's Octo-Taxi... In the Spanish version, it's Pulpaxi... probably in every version, they translate it to their own language... the absurd thing to do (if we are translating it to English) is to just leave it in Japanese, since most English speakers don't speak Japanese...
Takoshi does remember taxi, but I could live with octo-taxi or anything. My point is that I dislike changing already established vocabulary. Anyway, let's wait for Guren's decision.

[By the way: gynoid is better explained in the glossary, under gynoid (http://wiki.rippersanime.info/tiki-inde ... age=Gynoid) or Olympe (http://wiki.rippersanime.info/tiki-inde ... age=Olympe).]
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I agree, but as you are aware, generic does not mean correct. I know I am stubborn, but I cannot see why to insist with wrong terms.
http://www.thefreedictionary.com/android

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Android_(robot)

Android is not incorrect. Android = Robot with human form. That's it. It does not differentiate between male or female.

But honestly I don't care about that. I was talking about the Octo-Taxi.
If anything, we should either translate Octo-Taxi into English, since English seems to be LADDER's official language, or French, since the Republic of Venus is francophonic... I don't think Japanese is used much in Kishiro's universe...
I think from a plot-wise perspective... either a English or French translation would be correct...
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Burning Angel wrote: Android is not incorrect. Android = Robot with human form. That's it. It does not differentiate between male or female.
When I say incorrect I mean that andro means male human, simply. Anyway, the Wikipedia page you gave does differentiate android and gynoid.
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When I say incorrect I mean that andro means male human, simply. Anyway, the Wikipedia page you gave does differentiate android and gynoid.
Yes, in the same way that "Man" can mean:

1. An adult male human.
2. A human regardless of sex or age; a person.

Definition for Android:

1. A robot that resembles a man.
2. A robot that resembles a human. A Humanoid.

Again, this discussion doesn't matter that much.
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Burning Angel wrote:
Yes, in the same way that "Man" can mean:

1. An adult male human.
2. A human regardless of sex or age; a person.
Indeed, but I insist: andro refers exclusively to the male human.

Burning Angel wrote: Again, this discussion doesn't matter that much.
Actually, it has become an academic discussion, and that point makes it interesting,even because I do not have such debates every day.
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Updated.

- Takoshi. It's Takoshi in the italian edition too :|
- kaklack. Well...I'm not any good with sfx translations so that should be the sound made
when the commander slides a part of the submachine gun forward and backwards
to ready it to fire. Or...it could be the sound of the magazine fitting in its slot.
The problem is that the scene is not very clear and the sfx is put up there.
What do we use then?
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Actually, it has become an academic discussion, and that point makes it interesting,even because I do not have such debates every day.
Fair enough.
Indeed, but I insist: andro refers exclusively to the male human.
I admit that gynoid is probably the more exact term, but android isn't incorrect either. It officially means "automaton that resembles a human".
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Takoshi. It's Takoshi in the italian edition too
From a practical standpoint, "Octo-Taxi" is a term everyone will understand.

From an official standpoint, Viz uses the term "Octo-Taxi".

From a story standpoint, neither LADDER nor the Republic of Venus would call it "Takoshi", since they use English and French, respectively.
kaklack. Well...I'm not any good with sfx translations so that should be the sound made
when the commander slides a part of the submachine gun forward and backwards
to ready it to fire. Or...it could be the sound of the magazine fitting in its slot.
The problem is that the scene is not very clear and the sfx is put up there.
What do we use then?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qQYlpueC ... re=related
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Guren wrote: The problem is that the scene is not very clear and the sfx is put up there.
What do we use then?
All right! It is explained. Keep it, simply. :D
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Burning Angel wrote: I admit that gynoid is probably the more exact term, but android isn't incorrect either. It officially means "automaton that resembles a human".
I promise this is my last text about this topic. I have no intention of making a war. Far from that. I simply am fond of changing ideas with intelligent people.

1. The doctor who treats impotence, premature ejaculation and other problems exclusive of males is the andrologist.
2. The doctor who treats PMS, dysmenorrhea and other problems exclusive of females is the gynecologist.
3. The scientist who studies human populations is the anthropologist.

As far as I know, such a differentiation exists in all European languages.
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Sorry for the chaos in the first paragraph... I essentially changed the structure in all the sentences...

1.Schematic. // Diagram.

3.The soldiers belonging to “NEWORDER” established by Mbadi in the year es. 474 are the so-called “Stealth Army”. // The “Stealth Army” is composed of soldiers from the "NEW ORDER", established by Mbadi in ES 474.

NEWORDER is LADDER exclusive army and can be approved to operate over national borders by means of LADDER treaty jurisdiction. // NEW ORDER is LADDER’s exclusive army, and can be authorized to operate beyond national borders under LADDER Treaty jurisdiction.

Starting from the standard military gear it is the very first solar system unit that introduced the optics stealth function. // It’s the very first Solar System military unit to use optical stealth technology as standard-issue military gear.

In these equipments, cutting-edge technology is used as a luxury. // The most cutting-edge technology is used in this equipment.

4. STEALTH ARMY SUIT. The exterior, made by an elastic smart polymer together with a power support function demonstrates high movement efficiency. // STEALTH ARMY SUIT. The surface, composed of an elastic smart polymer, combined with a power support function, displays high movement efficiency.

5. STEALTH FUNCTION. It has optic, electromagnetic, infra-red rays, noise stealth function. Being airtight, it can act in space. It owns anti-radiation, anti-gas, anti-germs functions as well. // STEALTH MODES. It has optical, electromagnetic, infrared, and acoustic stealth modes. Since it’s airtight, it can operate in space. It also has anti-radiation, anti-gas, and anti-germ functions as well.

6. For long time periods of activity in space, it equips options like a backpack and so on. // For long periods of activity in space, it equips options like thrusters and so on.

7. SUBMACHINE GUN. Inside an air-tight structure a submachine gun that saves bullets piercing power concerning easeness of usage and safety is employed. // SUBMACHINE GUN. Inside an air-tight structure, a submachine gun is employed since it exchanges firepower for comfort and safety.

8. The Stealth Army rappelling the orbital elevator. // The Stealth Army rappelling down the orbital elevator.

9. LONG RIFLE. It has a high piercing efficiency and can fare more than well against cyborgs with high abilities. // ASSAULT RIFLE. It has armor-piercing efficiency and can fare better against skilled cyborgs.

10. SPECIAL MILITARY GEAR 1. HIGHORDER company commander Tzykrow's suit, unit under Mbadi's direct control. The mask design differs greatly. // SPECIAL MILITARY GEAR 1. HIGH ORDER company commander Tzykrow's suit, unit under Mbadi's direct control. The mask design differs greatly.

12. SPECIAL MILITARY GEAR 2. Unit 405, a special anti-terrorism unit. Powerful even among NEWORDER, it has been seen easily succeeding in the operation to recover Olympus space port. // SPECIAL MILITARY GEAR 2. Unit 405, a special anti-terrorism unit. Powerful even for NEW ORDER standards, it has been seen operating efficiently during the mission to recover Olympus space port.

13. VARIABLE SIZE. The wearer personalize it in case he's wearing a Stealth Suit for the first time. The suit automatically changes form and volume fitting the wearer's height and constitution. After this, it is preserved until initialized. // ADJUSTABLE SIZE. The wearer can personalize it in case he's wearing a Stealth Suit for the first time. The suit automatically changes form and volume fitting the wearer's height and constitution. After this, it is preserved until initialized.

14. INNER SUIT. The wearer has on a thin inner suit like tights. This one has a lump of sensors monitoring the wearer condition and transmitting the data to the shell suit. // INNER SUIT. The wearer has on a thin inner suit, similar to tights. This one has a group of sensors monitoring the wearer condition and transmitting the data to the shell suit.

16. ACTIVITIES. It boasts brilliant war records: it was struck by Caerula, decapitated by Zekka's motorbike, kicked by Alita and so on. // ACTIVITIES. It boasts brilliant war records: it was struck by Caerula, decapitated by Zekka's motorbike, kicked by Alita, and so on.

17. Stealth Army being eaten by a Venusian Takoshi. // The Stealth Army being eaten by a Venusian Octo-Taxi.


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13. Aaah, how joyous!! // Aaah, how wonderfull!!

15. With this our sufferings due to that Zekka have ended. // Our misery caused by Zekka is finally over.

16. That bastard, what kind of grudge did he have with us? // That bastard, what did he have against us?


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2. Did you forget our reason to exist!? // Did you forget our mission in life!?

3. It's that we can do what others can't do!! // It’s to do things others can’t do!!
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Thanks Burning, updated.
About this: 6. For long periods of activity in space, it equips options like thrusters and so on.
I left "backpack" since it's what it's written in the original instead of "thrusters" written in the lower description.
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Here is a quick change...

3. The “Stealth Army” is composed of soldiers from the "NEW ORDER", established by Mbadi in ES 474. NEW ORDER is LADDER's exclusive army and can be authorized to operate beyond national borders under LADDER Treaty. It’s the very first Solar System military unit to use optical stealth technology as standard-issue military gear. The most cutting-edge technology is used in this equipment. //

The “Stealth Army” is composed of soldiers from the "NEW ORDER", established by Mbadi in ES 474. NEW ORDER is LADDER's exclusive army and can be authorized to operate beyond national borders under the LADDER Treaty. It’s the very first Solar System military unit to use optical stealth technology as standard-issue military gear. The most cutting-edge technology is used in this equipment.
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