Jashin wrote:You proofread the translation after editing?
No offense to those who are responsible for the trans, but they're quite poor and could use some serious QA. If you post it here or send it to me I can do that.
what's a serious QA ?
I read the translation of omicron91, and this one is well better than mine.
I agree with all the arrangement between our 2 translation. thx !
I go on the translation, no doubt I made a lot of faults, but I just try...
page 24 to 36 :
page 24 :
geriperi (the name of the man) : one of these famus "MTG Mark II" by proximus...
I saw some in the shop of rejects of a friend...
the parts are rare, that can take time, hihi
koyomi : ...
geriperi : but don't despair !
those who you seek will not leave before a long time, be quiet
geriperi : you're looking for den, aren't you ?
it's not really an amateur camera...
koyomi : Hein !?!
geriperi : oohhh here it was !
geriperi : but this camera doesn't fit you
don't you want to change with this one ? hihi
page 25 :
koyomi : are you joking ?
(thinking) it seems you're interested in
(thinking) you wanted my camera !!
this camera is very important to me !!
geriperi : well, but are you worthy of a MTG MARK II ?...
a contest of photography against me !! hihi
page 26 :
koyomi : oups ....
geriperi : it's without doubt too difficult for you...
first try to shoot chavez.
koyomi : your name is also chavez...
I'm going to take a great picture of you, chavez
koyomi : hu ! don't move !!
koyomi : don't lick it !!
rhaaaa
caption : first day, total defeat...
page 27 :
caption : then I accept the picture daily contest against this strange old man... geriperi
geriperi : you're too relax !! hihi
koyomi : shut up, it deconcentrates me !!!
geriperi : in these conditions, you will fail.
geriperi : today it's still me who wins !!
koyomi : shit, you'll see....
geriperi : here's well said...
but tell me.... what will you do if you re-find "den" ?
page 28 :
koyomi : it's obvious ! it will be a scoop !
to take pitures of him...
...
...
(thinking) : this time I've totally forgotten to take a picture....
master den....
koyomi :snif...
f.. for a scoop...
in fact... how could I make it ?...
page 29 :
koyomi : I... I don't know anymore how I have to live now...
I don't believe anymore in anything..!!
I don't have a hom in kuzutetsu...
but with master den... how could I react?.. tell me how...!!
I want to meet master den...
I want to meet him...!!
page 30 :
geriperi : she has real problems...
how could I answer her ?...
master den.
page 31 :
thus more than 10 days spent
the woman : as usual...
koyomi : and if i eat one...
if one thinks of it, the contest of photograph is right a swindle
and I haven't bandages any more
if I stay here, I wouldn't have any news about master Den.
right, let's go !!
he has to give me back my camera now
another people could repair it.
page 32 :
koyomi : chavez !
geriperi !
... and my camera !!??
... pfff
page 33 :
eakins : well, well
sorry for these violent way,
koyomi.
koyomi : you... aren't you the master of the farm ?...
if you kidnap me, noone give you a reward for me !...
eakins : my name's eakins
I hope you coming, you, the Barjack's idol.
light on !
page 34 :
koyomi : Master... Den ..!?
no, just aa empty shell...
eakins : as you can see, that's us who attacked the caravan with this robot.
this vagrant geriperi blackmail us, by threatening us all to reveal, then we made him disappear!!!
page 35 :
eakins : 2 month ago, we discovered what we consider a replica of "den"
by using the appearance and the force of "Den", feared as "the demon of the moor", all the misdeeds became possible !! firstly, we attacked with the cargo of the caravan
the strategy of plundering in itself was a total success, but, unforeseen events appear...
all the Barjack's veteran who have learnt the den's resurrection have gathered...
we can't use this armour like that any more... as it left, it's a fine mess...
koyomi : ....thus...
it was just a lie...
eakins : but every cloud has a silver lining, we worked out a plan which will make date !!
page 36 :
eakins : in 10 days, we will reform a new Barjack at the farm 3 !
and to make it more real, we would like that you support us !!!
koyomi : a new... Barjack ?...
eakins : of course, we don't think about great ambition like destroying zalem,
but by using the force of the Barjack's veteran, we want to pile up a comfortable fortune
do you join us ?
koyomi : ... all right
I'm with you.