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[crazyankan]

More posts than me now Sergio.
I must start spamming more

[Trebicyem]

Gunnm Complete Version Artbook part1 (RAW):

http://www.mediafire.com/?sharekey=b384 ... f6e8ebb871

Enjoy!

Gunnm Complete Version Artbook part2 (RAW):

http://www.mediafire.com/?sharekey=b384 ... f6e8ebb871

This link include the artbook from volume 2,3 and 5. There's nothing in book 4 and 6.

And that's about it ! You have everything from the "Complete" version. =D
Sergio, if you need anything else or if I need to rescan a specific page, feel free to msg me through youtube. I watch videos on youtube almost everyday. So I guess it's the easiest way to contact me. I should lurk this forum for a few more days then ... disapear ?!

Have fun translating the whole thing
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHA
xD

[crazyankan]

Trebicyem: Many thanks!

[Dharko]

Excellent master, the editing fuc$%"& machine now is in progress.

[Sergio Nova]

I apologize for my lack of time, but I will check the pages and comment.
Many thanks Trebicyem. I will check with crazyankan and ^Ripper, but I think the sculptors are already making your statue.

[Cailon]

I donate some concrete for the statue, too. Rise!

@litchi master: Cool! I have just some minor issues:

1st break
Actually, their first function was to explore all recesses of the solar system.
---> instead "recesses" I'd use "vastness"

The exploitation of the first deckmen goes back up to about 300 years.
---> is it really exploitation? not exploration?

...the deckman technology consisted in modifying a machine by inserting a brain
---> instead of "consisted in", "consisted of"

2nd break
The great advantage of deckmen was their faculties of adaptation,
---> instead of "faculties" I'd propose "abilities"

4th break
...their role being now reduced to simple operations, such as, for instance, signalling control.
---> "signaling", because signalling is BE

In the most forsaken regions, one may even happen/ chance to find completely rusty deckmen
---> I'd say "happen to find" is ok

[litchi master]

hardly have I come back from the lands dark where GLO shines not in the sky that I see my work criticized Cailon beware!!! lol

1st break
Actually, their first function was to explore all recesses of the solar system.
---> instead "recesses" I'd use "vastness"

vastness is ok it fits the context, I was just translating the French which uses a colloquial expression equivalent to "all nooks and corners" and as in the game deckmen are mostly in building I just didn't think it was too weird when rereading the art book. I just wanted to remain close to the original, I think your change is for the better. My grudge is somewhat lessened.

The exploitation of the first deckmen goes back up to about 300 years.
---> is it really exploitation? not exploration?

your question makes sense but it is not what the French says(or a typing mistake) the word is exploitation.here deckmen are seen as mere devices/ressource and the subject of the sentence is how long deckmen have been in use.

2nd break
The great advantage of deckmen was their faculties of adaptation,
---> instead of "faculties" I'd propose "abilities"

4th break
...their role being now reduced to simple operations, such as, for instance, signalling control.
---> "signaling", because signalling is BE

In the most forsaken regions, one may even happen/ chance to find completely rusty deckmen
---> I'd say "happen to find" is ok

abilities is fine with me, in fact I had hesitated myself when I translated the passage.
as I am mainly trained in British English I guess I was just not paying attention please feel free to make the change
so happen to find it will be.

...the deckman technology consisted in modifying a machine by inserting a brain
---> instead of "consisted in", "consisted of"

well I tend to disagre on this point

the deckman technology consisted in modifying a machine by inserting a brain and different body parts in it. Eventually, it was the opposite of cyborg making.

Given that "consist" is followed by an action, my training leads me to put "in " rather than "of" in this case, all the more so since it is a verb. the dictionnary seems to back me up on this point. but I'd rather ask Sergio what his opinion is on the subject given that he is the leading authority regarding grammar on the site. did I say I held a grudge against you? no I was just a little hot tempered that's all.

[Cailon]

Let me offer you 10 Hekatombs. The cattles are all very strong, of pure white and covered in odoriferousness.

Phew, thank god that my dict. spit out a mighty word like "odoriferousness"^^

- Exploitation: well, then maybe it really is an exploitation of the poor deckmen, I agree, lets leave it like that.
- signalling: BE is the better english anyway^^ but we cant use it with scanlations...
- You have good arguments for "consist in". I just went according to my feeling and didn't paid enough attention to the sentence structure.


btw: where were you, where GLO does not shine? xD

[litchi master]

in the dark land of the exams where all knowledge turns to naught and hope of entertainment vanishes, engulfed in the the shadows of despair.

more seriously I'll start working on the second part of the artbook tomorrow night. so I should upload new stuff on the forum next week.

[Sergio Nova]

I have finally edited the text on page 4.
Thanks a lot, litchi master and Cailon. Great work!!

[Sergio Nova]

I should have commented before, but I forgot entirely.

While reading it, I noticed that not only AK 14-19 is not canon anymore, but: 1. the whole BK, Ak thing is later replaced by Era Sputnik

Actually, there is nothing wrong about that.
The Koyomian calendar (that is a pleonasm, anyway ) was developed especially for the complete edition in order to summarize the events in Hyper Future Vision. Era Sputnik would be presented later, as you yourself said. Thus, the problem is exactly to report what comes after Alita's death, even because that part was removed from the complete edition, and does not make sense in the summary.

[HumanRage]

GLO 88

http://sharebee.com/d60ad5e3

[litchi master]

Hail to the Human Rage and many thanks!!
You rule!
this phase kicks ass!
by the way
when I started perusing at the content of the second part of the art book I noticed there were a couple of pages that could be interesting concerning motor ball just before the art book. could some one scan them as I no longer have a scanner. I can try to have them scanned but could take time. I have already partly translated the page.

this is how it goes

Major league
Motor Ball's elite
encounters even get to be broadcasted in Zalem.
The number of those who can aspire to access this league does not reach 50.

Second League
more elaborate Tactics, more developped fighting techniques as well as the players performances make this league the most popular of all leagues.

Third league
This is the gateway to Motor Ball. Caracterized by its violence, the third league appeals to numerous fans.

Basic League
This unofficial league is concerned with players who have not proved themselves yet, or those who could not be selected in superior leagues. Matches take place in the streets.

The pyramidal structure of Motorball


The different Motorball leagues are run by the factories. it's a sport which attracts numerous players in Kuzutetsu, some players even come from beyond Kuzutetsu's borders to try their luck.

Therefore the number of those taking part, if one choses to include the basic league (also known as 4th league) is tremendous. The 10 huge circuits spread out/ scattered all over Kuzutetsu, employ large quantities of people, and make Motor ball one of the big industies in town.

the rest is soon to come

[litchi master]

a betting system comparable to pools (sports betting) is set for every race. The spectators can also watch the exploits of their favorite player and feel the same emotions by connecting to their visual information monitoring.



illustration

schematization of the monitoring system

man



300km/h speed



player

transmitter

wireless transmision

circuit control tower

audience ratings

pits

coach : go for it!!

Cable transmission

players' visual monitoring connected in parallel

spectators

robber taking advantage of the situation to attack the spectator



In order to increase the audience ratings of the monitors, not only must players have the will to win but also endeavour to make a show during the race.



KUZUTETSU AND MOTORBALL



The two most popular major sports events in Kuzutetsu are the Coliseum, in the Eastern Area, and Motorball in the Western area (Ido's cyberclinic islcated in the Eastern Area on Tempest Avenue)



the Coliseum duels take place in the substratum of Kuzutetsu, the fighters are cyborgs who often exceed 5m in height who are equipped with weapons as powerful asthey are ingenious. One could compare that with some sort of Cyber wrestling.



a duel in Coliseum



As for Motorball it is an event which requires huge structures composed of multiple mazes routes are as complex as they are hazardous.

It is a sport which is both akin to baseball and car racing(formula one type).

[litchi master]

the seven basic rules of MotorBall

He who crosses the finishing line with the motor ball is declared winner.

The circuit is a one track. Any player willingly going back more than 3meters gets a penalty.

Any player standing still for more than a minute is considered as disqualified.

Whenever the motorball gets out of the track, or damaged, the race is temporarily stopped for the time necessary to put another one on the track.

The use of all weapons that are not part of the player's the body, missile or propelled weapons, explosive weapons, as well as weapons emitting radiations are forbidden in Motorball. It is equally banned to fly or to use any kind of boosters.

Any fight on the pit lane will cause a disqualification.

A player cannot enter the pits when he's holding the Motorball.

Special rule: In the case only two players should remain on the track, the game is then declared a duel. The winner is the one who will have defeated his opponent in hand to hand combat.
Rules 1 to 4 do not apply in the case of a duel.

[Cailon]

I thought, since this is actually the thread for the RAWs, with our long scripts we are making it too confusing...

I started a thread for our work, here:
http://www.rippersanime.com/Forum/viewt ... ?f=5&t=414

What do you say, ok?

[crazyankan]

http://www.mediafire.com/?sharekey=ba8e ... 2a06f8a891
Uploaded many raws here.

[moooV]

GLO volume 4, page 57

One day, the skies in the night sky will burn out.

Change "skies" to "stars".

[moooV]

GLO vol.5 page 163. Sechs: "woth" -> "worth".

[moooV]

GLO v6 page 43 "more intrepid that you". "that" -> "than"
page 46 "I can fisht without getting distracted" "fisht" -> "fight"
page 103 "we can't even pubicize" "pubicize" -> "publicize"
page 127 "physically separates" "separates" -> "separated"
page 139 "as we wait wih bated breathe" "wih" -> "with"
page 140 "it looks like... ... it is been sealed off" "it is been" -> "it has been"


Also, this thing isn't translated.



GLO v7, page 14 "how actions from the past affects the world and Alita now" "affects" -> "affect"

GLO v9 page 32 "honesty" -> "honestly"


PS.
I've noticed many mistakes in the volumes, but they keep being corrected on the fly when I'm reading - so I can't post them here for a third year in a row. This time I've just written them out not to forget to post them. Unfortunately, I've started doing it only while reading vol.6, so I'll post the preceding ones the next year.

[ack44]

Dunno Chinese!

[dastardlybastard]

The link to phase 63 doesn't work. Can somebody fix that?

[Erika]

Also, this thing isn't translated.



I decyphered the first row, Google translate says:

卡爾蘿拉 = Carl Laura

Wich in my opinion, the panel says: "Kaeula Sungwis". And my Euro edition confirmed it.

[moonlit]

Helle every one～I am a Chinese
卡爾蘿拉 = Caerula
桑格維絲 = Sanguis